Walt: Write a Deconstructed
So for the last week, we have been learning how to write a deconstructed holiday recount. We had to write what we saw smelled, tasted, heard, and felt.
Reflection: I found it very easy to get them to think of what I did. I found it a bit hard to make it sense.
Next time I will: make it longer and use better grammar.
Kia ora Cullen, I really liked your 'Deconstructed recount' blog post because of the way you described your holiday using Show, Don't tell. I also enjoyed your post because you explained details and when you said 'feeling the soft popcorn getting crushed by my hand...' I could see a picture of that in my head. Maybe next time you could add more detail, check your spelling and proofread. What movie did you see? Nice work Cullen, keep up the great effort! Ms Peters.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Cullen it´s Nikau from your class here. I really liked your Deconstructed recount blog post it looks like you had a very fun holiday going to the movies. Maybe next time instead of smelled you could put smelt. But apart from that, keep up the good work and blog ya later.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Nikau, it´s Cullen. Thanks for giving me some advice for next time. Blog ya later.
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